I like your way of classification. I think it is very good idea! Mine is classified by a place. But I think your opinion in conclusion is very short. I'm not sure it could be an opinion. And your first body paragraph isn't indented. But it is a good essay though : )
Hi Khiem, i liked your thesis statement, but your introduction is to short and you have to be more general, and your conclusion is to short you have to Summarize your essay , but your classification is good.
Your essay has good idea and grammar . However , you have to define a little about trouble for someone when they learn another language , so they can more understand your topic , just my thinking :)
You know we just sleep but we do not know there are sleeping stages. I think this stages when you understand them you will sleep deeply. I hope my sleeping does in these processes because when I sleep I wake up too tired. Romai
I like your way of classification. I think it is very good idea! Mine is classified by a place. But I think your opinion in conclusion is very short. I'm not sure it could be an opinion. And your first body paragraph isn't indented. But it is a good essay though : )
ReplyDeleteHi Khiem,
ReplyDeletei liked your thesis statement, but your introduction is to short and you have to be more general, and your conclusion is to short you have to Summarize your essay , but your classification is good.
Your essay has good idea and grammar . However , you have to define a little about trouble for someone when they learn another language , so they can more understand your topic , just my thinking :)
ReplyDeleteHi Khiem
ReplyDeleteYou know we just sleep but we do not know there are sleeping stages. I think this stages when you understand them you will sleep deeply. I hope my sleeping does in these processes because when I sleep I wake up too tired.
Romai
Hey Khiem,To be tottaly honest,you taught me something that I did not know. I did not know how many stages there are. Nice job man!
ReplyDeleteKhiem, you can view a copy of your essay with comments here: https://docs.google.com/document/d/14NQM1PW6bJ9GM5qTm1NNMqwuecPgYYlwEO18gC4bcYs/edit
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